Corvin Vandra

That's truly remarkable. I loved it. I'm ashamed to say I'm not here to impress you, for I can find no common theme. I just loved reading it. One quick ...

Awesome, truly awesome. I feel the same way what with the bordeom and whatnot. I've even been where you were, seen that beauty. It's one of my fondest memories, and ...

Not too shabby. I enjoyed it for the most part. Anyways, here we go. "The jutsu had worked, but who knew how long Momo could keep it up. Come on ...

Wow. The ending really threw me. Awesome poem though, great flow, great rhythm, great everything. Just a few quick things. "Standing up now, our hands intertwined, the sun blinding us ...

I loved the first stanze, by the way. The third one was awesome, too. On to the crit, I suppose. The fourth verse kind of stopped the flow of the ...

Yes! Great, I love Bob and Steve. They were the best part of X-Play, until they turned into Attack of the Show. Start turning these out, they're awesome. All I ...

Jeez, that's amazing. Seriously, there's nothing I can say that's negative. Except maybe work on the spacing after the commas, heh. "A gentle touch and an endless hug, never to ...

Really good start. Excellent writing, but very little of anything else. As a reader it's just hard to "connect" with Carmen. I couldn't feel sorry for her or her loss, ...

Awesome story. I agree with Gryphon, you have a very pretty style. But it just seems like the little girl is so seperate from everything. Myabe that is the point, ...